Slender Story

He needs to feed, but he doesn’t want to be seen. He will mesmerize you with his long, slender, arms, lulling you into a deep trance of comfort while at the same time filling you with horror. He can creep into your dreams, completely take over, and never stop until you are to terrified to leave the house, or even close your eyes if fear he will come for you. Come closer to you. He is deviant; playing with his prey like a cat would a mouse. He loves the smell of a lower life forms fear, humans only, since they would do anything just to not lose their pathetic, meaningless, lives. How quickly the blood rushes through their veins. The utter terror in the eyes of a young girl who wants nothing more than to be at home, with her parents again.

So far, that's all I got. It does seem a little weird by my standards, But what do you guys think? Any advice on what to add?

It sounds like a prelude of how he's about to go after his next young victim, if you ask me.

Maybe next could be in regards to describing his next young victim to be, like "Lizzie was a six year old blonde girl" and blah blah, give her some mannerisms and such (having tea time with her dolls, little Bobby two doors down liked her, but he was too much of a doofus)...like enjoying playing in the park that is mentioned in Marble Hornets (I forget the name of it), even though something about the park always seemed slightly "wrong".

I'm sure you can figure out what that "wrong" is

Slender Sante wrote:

It sounds like a prelude of how he's about to go after his next young victim, if you ask me.

Maybe next could be in regards to describing his next young victim to be, like "Lizzie was a six year old blonde girl" and blah blah, give her some mannerisms and such (having tea time with her dolls, little Bobby two doors down liked her, but he was too much of a doofus)...like enjoying playing in the park that is mentioned in Marble Hornets (I forget the name of it), even though something about the park always seemed slightly "wrong".

I'm sure you can figure out what that "wrong" is

Thank you so much! That gave quite a bit to go on for book I'm writing. At first I was planning for it to be through Slendy's eyes, but I can't really get much out of that. (At least for now.) and I decided that would be the prologue and added a couple things at the end. I started Chapter 1 also.
http://peachykeen12.deviantart.com/journal/Slenderman-322505540

LixxieLicious wrote:

Thank you so much!

You're welcome! Good start with her background with her friend and all too.